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PostSubject: Kitosu ("The Lightnings Spark").   Kitosu ("The Lightnings Spark"). Icon_minitimeMon Feb 13, 2012 3:34 pm

Name: Kitosu ("The Lightnings Spark").

Age: 16.

Bounty: 5,000 Beri.

Species: Human.

Occupation: Pirate, Captain, Fighter, Swordsman.

Allegiance: None.

Home Village/ Ocean: Whisky Peak.

Appearance:

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Kitosu is an average height male, standing at five feet eight inches. Bearing a skull tattoo on his back, with the outlined edges of a four pointed dagger in the background of the skull. His hair, short, and smoothly textured to run down his back, shoulder heighted. Dark blue balled beads around his neck, given to him by his father when he was a young boy, a couple of months before his father was murdered. No family relations. The same type of bracelet on his arm, same color as the beads around his neck, except some black in it, with black shorts and black sneakers. His eyes, baby blue colored, every once in awhile Kitosu stops to look over the ocean and watch the sunset looking to the sky and thinking about his father with every moment that passes.


History: With his mother killed in a tragic boating accident due to a storms wave pushing her body overseas, Kitosu wandered on his own and about after his father was killed, he was left with noone, Looking for a home, he'd hang around theifs and thugs all day, learning the lifestyle of a true bandit, looking up to them as if they were his true family, the ones he were supposed to be around. He felt at home with them, as he aged, he began to steal and rob civilians like there was no tomorrow, following the same agenda everyday, Kitosu came to a stop, after finding a fruit that glowed bright blue, this intrigued him, picking the fruit up, with his simple mindedness, he'd take a small bite, and somthing changed in him. His hands began to glow a bright blue,. Lightning surged through his hands to augment from the aura. Later on, Kitosu found out that this was one, out of the many devil fruits named the "Goro Goro no Mi".


Personality: A normal male Kitosu is, funny and very talkative, he is very curious, just as he was through his younger years. Always looking to explore and discover new things that the world has to offer him He goes on traveling far and wide, in search of his own purpose in life he must now find for himself.

Ship: N-A

Ship Flag: N-A

Devil Fruit: "Goro Goro no Mi" (Japanese Name: ゴロゴロの実).
English Name: Rumble-Rumble Fruit.
Meaning: Sound of Thunder.
Type: Logia.
Effect: The ability to generate electricity in a variety of forms.

Special Abilities: Black Leg Style, Yontōryū.

Learned techniques: "Rankyaku.", "1, 5 Million, 10, 20, 30, 50, 60 Million, 100, Max 200 Million Volt Vari.", "Sango.".

Weapons/Items: Kitosu carriers a black briefcase, which holds four special swords that he uses when needed for his "Yontōryū" swordsman style.

Goals: Travel, Meet new people, Thief up to 30,000 Beli worth of items.







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PostSubject: Re: Kitosu ("The Lightnings Spark").   Kitosu ("The Lightnings Spark"). Icon_minitimeMon Feb 13, 2012 5:48 pm

That appears to be a picture of Ace, if I'm not mistaken. Please find a different image or remove it all together. Using canon characters from any well-known series isn't allowed.

This is more of a technicality if anything, but you have "captain" listed in the occupations section, when the character is captain of any crew. Also, allegiance is where "pirate" would go. It would imply that he's loyal to whatever crew he's on, or no one for that matter.

I'd like to see a bit more history, as well. Devil Fruits are pretty rare, so it doesn't make a whole lot of sense to simply walk across one in the street. It also wouldn't be a bad idea to go into some of the reasoning to why he got his bounty either. For example, was he robbing civilians that eventually reported him to the marines? Please add on another good-sized paragraph to this section at least.

Stick on another few lines to personality as well.

From what's here, it doesn't make a whole lot of sense to why this character would know Black Leg style, Rokushiki, and a sword fighting style. It doesn't mention him receiving any special training for those anywhere, and a character doesn't learn something like those out of thin air unless they create it themselves. I'd also suggest trimming down the different fighting styles he knows, since the character is so young to begin with. He can possibly learn more during the actual rp, if warranted.

Please actually list the individual attacks and what happens during them. That way, people don't have to go look them up somewhere else. Also keep in mind that something as strong as 200 million volts probably isn't going to be approved, since killing other characters without permission isn't gonna fly.

If you have any questions, feel free to ask.
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PostSubject: Re: Kitosu ("The Lightnings Spark").   Kitosu ("The Lightnings Spark"). Icon_minitimeMon Feb 13, 2012 5:53 pm

this character is a discussing hodge-podge of cannon and is simply you picking and choosing things you like, including ace's appearance, this will not stand in the least
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PostSubject: Re: Kitosu ("The Lightnings Spark").   Kitosu ("The Lightnings Spark"). Icon_minitimeMon Feb 13, 2012 6:09 pm

Fine, I quit.
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